Re: [libreoffice-marketing] Re: Brochure-type: General Information

Hi :)
YES, that's solved it!!  :D  



The Base bit is still a bit too wordy for something where we only want a brief mention of Base and 
the word "also" still really bothers me a LOT.  Fixing that just means changing; 
"Base can also be used as a front-end"
to 
"Base is a front-end"

or even better just cut  the whole paragraph down to something like;
"Base is a full-featured desktop database that links closely with the other LibreOffice 
applications.  Base is a powerful front-end to most enterprise-class databases such as 
MySql/MariaDB or PostgreSQL. 

 So from 3 long and very wordy sentences down to 2 only medium wordy ones.



The bullet-points are not driving me dotty anymore.  It's all lined-up and looking great.  The 
sentence about languages is smooth.  Layout is MUCH better.  

There is a little white-space at the bottom of a few panels/columns that could most usefully be 
used to either 

1.  space-out the panel a bit to make it even easier on the eye OR
2.  left as is.  

Either way would be fine.  The white-space is not excessive and possibly isn't even enough to work 
with if going for option 1.  It's most natural and comfortable the way it is so i think leaving as 
is would be best.  



Many thanks for all the hard work on this!!  I think it's 99.9% perfect now.  Great stuff! :D
Thanks and regards from 

Tom :)  



> ________________________________
> From: Jean Weber <jeanweber@gmail.com>
> Sent: Sunday, 12 May 2013, 1:32
> Subject: Re: [libreoffice-marketing] Re: Brochure-type: General Information
>
>
> <snip />
>
> > > > We are trying to address Tom's complaint of p.2 panels 1 and 2.
> > > >
> > > > One of the corrections to the brochure that we could make is move the
> > > > complete bulleted list started on panel 1 and move it to panel 2 ... and
> > > > move the text from panel 2 --> panel 1.
> > > >
> > > > Just switching the text may address the spacing problem he mentions. Note
> > > > that we should also consider the flow of information and see if moving the
> > > > text has any impact on the "understandability" of the brochure.
> > > >
> > > > So, we may want to compare the versions of:
> > > >
> > > > https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LibreOfficeV.4.0.x-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInformation-USLtr_JHW.odt
> > > > USLtr_JHW version
> > > >
> > > > with the posted demonstration version of:
> > > >
> > > > http://www.parentreprise.com/images/LibreOffice/JuggledColumnsBrochurev4.0GeneralInformation.odt
> > > >
> > > > Should we adopt the moved text version?
> > >
> > > I'll look at the demo version a bit later when I have time, but I
> > > think I can improve the bullet points indentation issue in another
> > > way, less drastic that moving whole swags of text. Give me a few
> > > hours. :-)
> > >
> > > --Jean
> >
> >
> > I think the layout of the demo version (with the text switched) is
> > definitely better visually.  I'll apply my editorial changes to the
> > text, and also tweak the indentation of the bullet lists, and get an
> > updated copy to you later today.
> >
> > --Jean
>
>
> Here is my latest iteration of the Letter version of the draft
> brochure. See what you think.
> https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LO4-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInfo-USLtr_JHW_rev.odt
> https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LO4-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInfo-USLtr_JHW_rev.pdf
>
> I'll do the A4 version if you like this one.
>
> --Jean

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