[libreoffice-marketing] Re: Brochure-type: General Information

Le 11/05/13 08:32 PM, Jean Weber a écrit :
> Here is my latest iteration of the Letter version of the draft
> brochure. See what you think.
> https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LO4-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInfo-USLtr_JHW_rev.odt
> https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LO4-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInfo-USLtr_JHW_rev.pdf
>
> I'll do the A4 version if you like this one.
>
> --Jean

Thanks.

IMO, the only thing I would have a problem with is p.2, third panel, The 
passage:

* "The LibreOffice user interface is available in many languages, even 
in languages for which localized commercial software is not available. 
Support for over 100 languages and still counting."

The separation of the last two lines ... the last line "languages and 
still counting" looks like it no longer belongs to the paragraph and we 
should avoid hyphenating the word "languages", By convention, we should 
be writing "one hundred" when writing in paragraph form which would fix 
the problem, but the number "100" has larger impact. I would then 
suggest remove the bold sentence and just make "100 languages" in bold 
and this still seems to bring home the point that we support over "100 
languages".

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I am not sure of the centered text on p.2 top of panel 1:


LibreOffice is a free, power-packed,
open source productivity office suite for
MS Windows, Mac OS X, and GNU/Linux

As it is the only centered text left on the panels, it looks a little 
out of place. Perhaps flush-right would look better? I printed out both 
centered and flush-right.

Alternatively, we could leave that passage centered, add an extra empty 
line at the end of the paragraph; on the next paragraph, leave as is, 
but, make the line:

"LibreOffice is the suite for you."

Change it to centred, "heading 2"; change it to green (same as the above 
"MS Windows, Mac OS X, and GNU/Linux"; remove the "italics" on the line; 
add an exclamation mark at the end of the sentence for added subliminal 
effect.

"LibreOffice is the suite for you!"

This seems to balance the panel more and when printed all of the 
"headings" look centered on the printouts. Have a look a the .png and 
.odt files here:

http://parentreprise.com/images/LibreOffice/LO4-CommunityBrochure_GeneralInfo-USLtr_MP_rev.png

http://parentreprise.com/images/LibreOffice/LO4-CommunityBrochure_GeneralInfo-USLtr_MP_rev.odt

Cheers,

Marc


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