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Hi Drew

Le 2011-05-26 10:36, drew a écrit :


Hi Marc, et al

Pushed new copies to the wiki just now

http://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LibO-Pamphlet-platforms-support.pdf

  or for the ODF file...

http://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LibO-Pamphlet-platforms-support.odt


Nice work!

Comments, quite a few:

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The free power-packed, Open Source personal oductivity suite for: --> missing "pr"oductivity

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Designed to address your ... page. --> a "run on sentence" that is too long. The word "whether" needs an "or" somewhere to complete it. This paragraph should be reworked.

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LibreOffice uses Open Document Format (ODF), recognized by many governments worldwide as the default format for office documents. --> we should promote the abbreviated form of ODF as much as possible to break the .doc view that this is a document abbreviated format. Also removed the "," in from of "as" and also removed the "S" at the end of "documents".

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Should we put the (NGO) next to "Non Governmental Organizations"? There seems to be space for this and it is quite the recognizable abbreviation in many countries.

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LibreOffice is easy to use thanks to its clearly structured intuitive menu. --> no need for a comma between structured and intuitive.

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This is different from most, closed source, commercial product development models where the development happens inside a closed group, and time based releases frequently slip. --> This doesn't actually show any difference with the opensource group. We should find a factually relevant reason of an advantage of a time based release schedule that is measurable. Why is it better? I don't think we need to bother comparing to closed group development.

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LibreOffice is free software, and is based on free tools. --> LibreOffice is free software that is based on free tools. or LibreOffice is free software that makes use of free tools. -- There are too many sentences with the same "and" ...

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Our aim, over time ... --> Over time, our aim is -- no need to split the subject with the verb here. I think it read better this way.

... is to make it easy to build releases of LibreOffice ... --> substitute "for LibreOffice" with "of".

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For the most conservative users, we recommend a commercially supported version, which enables you to indirectly support the project’s development. Such stable versions will typically be based on a point release, such as LibreOffice 3.3.2 today;

For those interested in the bleeding edge, who want to enjoy new features and fixes, we recommend LibreOffice 3.4.0, release candidates, betas or even nightly builds, which enable a participation in the development, evaluation and quality control process; Of course, as the 3.4 series matures, we will reach a point where we will recommend a 3.4.x release as being suitable even for the most conservative users.

--> this is very informative. If there were a way to explain this without referring to a LibreOffice version (3.3.2 and 3.4), we would not have to update the pamphlet at the next version update. Maybe we should push to formalize the name of the point release and the bleeding edge releases. If not these two paragraphs are great. Maybe we could change it to:

For the most conservative users, we recommend a commercially supported version, which enables you to indirectly support the project’s development. Such stable versions will typically be based on a point release, such as LibreOffice found on our download page.;

For those interested in the bleeding edge, who want to enjoy new features and fixes, we recommend LibreOffice the release candidates, betas or even nightly builds, which enable a participation in the development, evaluation and quality control process; Of course, as the development series matures, we will reach a point where we will recommend this release as being suitable even for the most conservative users.

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The Document Founation --> missing the "d"

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Free from our large, dedicated community of developers, contributors and supporters the make up the Document Foundation --> Sound a little choppy and could be read as meaning something else, maybe use: Free to download from our large, dedicated community of developers, contributors and supporters the make up the Document Foundation. --> you will also need a period here. We should also add: Visit our support pages at: --> otherwise the previous sentence would seem to call for the download page.

You may support our work on LibreOffice and The Document Foundation with donations, details available --> maybe use: You may support our work on LibreOffice and The Document Foundation with your donations. Details available at:


It is just me, or should we start thinking of standardizing our sub-site nomenclature? For example we have:

http://www.libreoffice.org/support
http://donate.documentfoundation.org

Shouldn't we have?

http://support.libreoffice.org
http://donate.documentfoundation.org

Also, is the PayPal method really donations@documentfoundation.org? I don't know of anyone who pays this way. We normally do what I see on our site on http://www.libreoffice.org/get-involved/donate/ with an amount window and a PayPal button. Maybe we should use this on the pamphlet?

Cheers

Marc



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