[us-marketing] Re: phamphlet for inside NA-DVD tall case

Le 2011-05-16 08:12, drew a écrit :
> On Mon, 2011-05-16 at 03:33 -0400, drew wrote:
> > Howdy,
> >
> > Uploaded a submission of a tri-fold pamphlet for use inside the tall
> > disc case. Most of the text is from a file Tim sent via PM a few days
> > ago, with a bit brought back from the first one I put up earlier.
>
> > http://wiki.documentfoundation.org/cgi_img_auth.php/8/86/Na-dvd-insert.pdf
>
> <snip>
>
> > http://lo-portal.us/temp/na-dvd-insert-may-16.odt
>
> updated both files just now, fixed typos, some formatting changes.
>
> Middle panel on first page could use some re-wording still, IMO
> also need to add some trademark info still - so I'll hold off on
> touching though for the rest of the morning
>
> Thanks
>
> //drew

Thanks for doing this Drew and Tim. Here are my suggestions (remember, 
they are only my suggestions):

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p.1, panel 1

Info
* brief information ...

*** (suggest a bullet at the start of the blurb) ***

Install
* has the various ...

*** (suggest a bullet at the start of the blurb) ***

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p. 1, panel 2

Extensions
An extension ... These include add-ons such as formatting tools, 
language tools, and over 180 localised dictionary extensions.

*** (I don't think you need the rest of the blurb on Mexican 
dictionaries and one or more for each country listed. I find it strange 
that there are 20 different Mexican dictionaries. We will have to get 
some of our Mexican language partners to sort this out. We should also 
avoid the use of the 1st person plural "We".)  ***

These extensions, as well as most files ending in the .oxt file 
"extension" can be installed by using the default Extension Manager 
[Tools>Extension Manager].

*** (I tried to condense this sentence, it sounded too choppy.) ***

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p. 1, panel 2

Templates

There are two types of template files included on the DVD:

* Files ending with ".oxt" will add templates to the “File > New > 
Template and Document“ list.

*The second type of files are in compressed/archived file groups and can 
be unarchived using a standard archive manager program [7Zip is included 
in the list on the “Extras” page]. These are sample files that are 
opened like normal document files.

*** (reworked paragraphs, bullet form please) ***

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p. 1, panel 2

Documentation

Documentation files included on this DVD are in either the ".odt" 
OpenDocument file format [ODF], a long established International 
Standard [ISO] set of file formats, or, ".pdf" Adobe Acrobat file 
format. LibreOffice uses the international standard ODF as its default 
office suite file formats.

*** (I tried to condense this to a stronger paragraph, we should also 
not speak of MS in a negative way and MS claims they are following an 
ISO approved xml standard anyway. let's not mention them at all in this 
passage. No need to sell people on the .pdf format. If they don't know 
about it, they can use our format, which is what we are trying to 
promote.) ***

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p. 1, panel 3

There are two types of artwork files on the included on the DVD:

* Files ending with ".oxt" will be added to the "Tools>Gallery" option.

* The second type of files are in compressed/archived file groups and 
can be unarchived using a standard archive manager program [7Zip is 
included in the list on the “Extras” page]. These are are individual or 
groups of image files that can be used by LibreOffice or any other 
packagethat can use image files.

*** (reworked paragraph to match the Templates paragraph, bullet form 
please) ***

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p. 2 panel 2

*** Our mission is, IMHO, a little slim. Whereas later we say "Tell the 
world you share our visions, join our group and fan page at 
http://facebook.com/documentfoundation. There is little vision that we 
have given the user on the pamphlet. This is something we really need to 
get to work on as a marketing group. ***

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Cheers

Marc





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