[libreoffice-website] Re: New Sponsors page

Hi Charles, Erich et al,

Le 2012-10-22 05:54, Charles-H. Schulz a écrit :
> Hello,
>
> Thanks to Erich Christian, the Sponsors/Advisory Board page is online. I
> initially wanted to have a gallery (not using the PhotoShuffler) but the
> way he rearranged the page looks good now. I might add some more info on
> the AB later on.
> https://www.libreoffice.org/about-us/sponsors/
>
> Best,
> Charles.

Nice page, however, the text needs a little TLC.

"The LibreOffice project and its entity, the Document Foundation count 
many supporters. Among them, a few have decided to sponsor us with 
important resources. Sponsorship is open to any entity that contributes 
funds and for special cases, specific resouces to the Document 
Foundation. Sponsorship runs on a yearly basis and gives access to the 
Advisory Board of the Document Foundation. If you are interested in 
becoming a sponsor please contact the Board of Directors ."

Suggest:

"The LibreOffice project and its entity, the Document Foundation, count 
many supporters. Among these, a few have decided to sponsor us with 
important resources. Sponsorship is open to any entity that contributes 
funds towards the general operations of the project, or, contributes 
funds for use destined to specific resources to the Document Foundation. 
Sponsorship runs on a yearly basis and gives access to the Advisory 
Board of the Document Foundation. If you are interested in becoming a 
sponsor please contact the Board of Directors."

I am unclear as to the section: "The LibreOffice project and its entity, 
the Document Foundation ..." I am not sure as to the use of the word 
"entity", perhaps something more like "parent organization" would be 
better, or "parent project holder" or something to that effect. "Entity" 
makes the relationship between LibreOffice and the TDF very unclear.

Cheers,

Marc

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